BEFORE:
Hi teacher!
Who I am? Well it is a difficult question because I don't know who I am but I try to explain it. I think that I'm a crazy person and happy and I don't know maby likeable person well I enjoy it but the reality is that I want to hide my realy me because I feel sad all day and every day when I'm alone at home because it's when I think and it's horrible I am sad and pessimistic person but I have to live with this.
I do batxillerat because in a future I will want to go at university in Barcelona. For the moment I don't know that what I will do but I think that I will study for PE teacher. It's a simple answer I know but I don't have any arguments for what I do batxillerat. I'm sorry.
AFTER:
Hi teacher!
My name is Laura I'm 16 and I live in Castelló d'Empúries. I have a little sister that she is 14 and her name is Júlia. She study 2nd of ESO and she play volleyball. My mother is 41 and she works in a pharmacy. My father is 42 and he is mechanic by boat. My hobbies are to play volleyball and to ride a horse I love this two sports! This year I play volleyball to Olot that they be in 1st league "Catalana". I have two horses but I more ride one that she is Nina she is white is a good horse but it is 17 and she is old also I have a dog and her name is Nunú. I'm a happy person when I stay with my friends and family but when I stay alone I feel sad all the time. All the bad things torture me and there's not any day that I feel good when I stay alone. But well sometimes the best thing that you can do is stay with someone and hide your sentiment.
I do Batxillerat because I want to follow study. For the moment I think that I'll do PE teacher but I don't know. And the last year when I spoke with my mother and my father we arrived a conclusion that I do Batxillerat now and after Batxillerat we'll talk about what I'll do. It's easy I study because I don't know that what I'll do and I want follow study.